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Needed thread name: Fall of Antiqua (New Name!) btw folks, it's been called Fall of Antiqua for a really long time now. Not that you are expected to know that, just saiyan.

TTHeart, what is preventing you from consolidating the three pages into one? Is it pacing? I'm simply curious. If you'd like, I could work with you to make this happen. Maybe 1.5 pages, with the latter half of Page 2 being new content. I'd be really interested to see you rewrite this entirely. Sometimes it's best to try out "how about this?" scenarios just to see where your mind is currently. It's easy to get attached to existing work, particularly the longer it lives untouched. Sometimes we make work then leave it alone, allowing it to develop a false sense of immortality when really it's just our own ignorance of what should have been changed long before. Also, I still don't see how my critique was rude in any way. I took the time to honestly point out where I think this could be improved. I did not look for places needing development, I simply saw them; I was not searching for parts to bash—that would be cruel and meaningless, or rude. I care about the future of this project, which is why I invested myself in hopes that it might improve. I think the graphic novel medium is awesome (which is why I'm pursuing it myself) and want nothing more than success for TTHeart's endeavor. So yeah, let me know if you want to work hands-on or within this thread. Either way, don't give up now, and certainly don't feel diminished because people have seen flaws! Work is only as good as the worker makes it. You're the artist, we're the audience. If we're displeased now, then this is the best possible time to refine it into the material it needs to be! Better to define the core early than end up with 50 mediocre pages before realizing the flaws.

I'm talking Legend of Zelda crossed with early Final Fantasy, before characters started getting really specific. To basically draw on the recurring elements across the series: Chocobos Black Mages White Mages Red Mages Crystals Gilgamesh Summons (Shiva, Ifrit, Bahamut, etc.) Cids so on and so forth. Not merging OoT with FF7, but by using OoT/MM resources, build a game that equally represents the heart of both series. I probably wouldn't commit to such a project, but I fancy the idea! Might make some concept art at some point.

*Applause* NOW. To reanimate him so he uses a shield as well... Has anyone figured out custom animations?

Is that even a question? Of course!

Word, Megaton Hammer works great. I was thinking thematically (what weapon do you find in the Temple of the Ancients? Nail Bat of course!) Silly Squaresoft. But yeah, functionally the Megaton Hammer is totally appropriate. It works too, cause you know... you find it in a temple in Zelda, so yeah, good thinking! Ghirahim's Sword is sweet and I'm glad you're using it as well. Good ideas all around, seems the break cleared your mind.

Politely? How about no critique then. I offered critique because I too am working on a graphic novel right now, and I've encountered similar problems—the solutions of which I wanted to share in the form of suggestion. Take it or leave it. You can begin the story with these characters, just introduce them better. It's totally up to you to decide when your protagonist enters the picture.

You could easily consolidate all three of your current pages into a single page, and depending on how you do it, you might still have leftover space. It seems you aren't too comfortable with the writing part, so "..." gets more attention than, "Plaisantier. Have you been able to locate Serene yet?" "Unfortunately I have been able to confirm that she has perished from the Taint." ... HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA, THE TAINT. I'm sorry, that might be the best/worst possible name you could have chosen. I understand what you were going for, but: http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=taint Also, so far we've seen your purple dude in a total of six panels and three of them are basically the exact same pose. If he's supposed to be imposing at all, that's not helping. He has a visible mouth. Make it function like a mouth. Also, I don't think your shadows are heavy enough. They are light and blurry, giving everything a paper-thin quality. Nothing feels properly weighted, and with a floating character, you need that. Consider that in the panel where you see both characters in profile, the jester's shadow is only barely darker than your sorcerer's. Also, and this might sound like nitpicking, but you're using way too many pronouns. Really hard to hook me as a reader. "Taint? Originum? Benevento? Plaisantier? Serene?" With one page worth of content spread over three, you've introduced five pronouns, only one of which (Plaisantier) we understand the ownership of. I say: consolidate these three pages into one and rewrite for the sake of smoother conveyance. I feel totally alienated so far. The panels are so large and vacuous that they could benefit from being shrunken down. Currently, I see half-page panels with so little detail, filled with gradient-airbrush coloring that I honestly find myself asking, "that's it?" You've got enough room in those panels to write out a lengthy conversation. Instead, you have four lines of dialog (not counting "...") spread across two pages. "Plaisantier. Have you been able to locate Serene yet?" Could (should) fit in one speech bubble. By separating the sentences, it seems you were trying to find a reason to fill space—which is good, but that might not be the best method. Fill space with more visual information, but not too much. Even a planet outside the window would add to it. Also, there's just a handful of stars outside. Look at space images.

Mabe Village! This arrangement feels so fitting. It makes me nostalgic for Mario 64 for whatever reason, but that means you're doing it right. Heavy, the trailer was fantastic. The song managed to work—glad it wasn't the run-of-the-mill epic metal chorus song that everyone uses. From the footage alone, I'm really excited about what you're doing. Many changes, but not drastic ones. Increased fog in the Lost Woods is brilliant. 20x more immersive.

Oh hey! I'll make you a logo when the time comes. Man, we've got Link crossing into FF7 (Satoshi) and FF7 Chocobos entering OoT (HeavyZ), and let's not forget Sanguinetti's attempt to bring Cloud into OoT... when are we all gonna work together to make: THE FINAL FANTASY OF ZELDA ...borrowing equal elements from both series and making this awesome N64-styled world where everyone on the internet wins? Because I want to. Think about it... Garlandorf.

This is so offensive. Also: nutscrack.

I've got nothing to contribute other than support. C'mon people, this can be executed fairly quickly!

Frankly, no. You can employ them right now. Three pages is nothing and you can rework what needs revision right now. That was some really good advice on Storm's part.

Pioneering! Fantastic work, I am very interested to see how this develops. Continue your good work CloudMax!

Oh darn, it's an actual reference. I was playing along in hopes that Hunter was pinning you up against some spontaneous feral odds! Oh well.

Fire — Fire Fire2 — Fire II (?) Fire3 — Eldin's Fire Ice — Ice Ice2 — Ice II (?) Ice3 — Faron's Ice Bolt — Thunder Bolt2 — Thunder II (?) Bolt3 — Lanayru's Thunder Definitely make Link/Cloud's "field sword" the Master Sword, even if he hasn't obtained it yet. +1 for Shade Sword & Melee Ganondorf's Sword. Phoenix Downs need to be "Bottled Fairies". I'll contribute more tomorrow, I gotta get some sleep.

Buster Sword — Practice Sword (SS) or Ordon Sword (TP) Mythril Saber — Kokiri Sword (MM) Hardedge — Armos Sword (SC2) Butterfly Edge — Razor Sword (MM/SC2) Enhance Sword — Gilded Sword (MM) Organics — Four Sword (TMC) Crystal Sword — Lokomo Sword (ST) Force Stealer — Magic Sword (SC2) Rune Blade — Murasame — Nail Bat — Noble Sword (OoX) — Find in Temple of the Ancients. (Looks like Master Sword; zero materia slots signifies that this is a 'fake') Yoshiyuki — Biggoron Sword (OoT/SC2) — Find in Rocket Town. Apocalypse — Master Sword (SS) — You find this at the end of the Ancient Forest; is there not a more appropriate location for the Master Sword in FF7? Heaven's Cloud — Great Fairy's Sword (MM/SC2) — Find in Gelnika. Ragnarok — Sage Sword (TP) — Win from Proud Clod. Ultima Weapon — Helix Sword (MM) — Win from Ultima Weapon. Here's a cool guide to Link's swords across the series: http://lazytechguys.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/10/evolution_of_link__s_sword_wallpaper_by_blueamnesiac.png

Face the moose, Branden. Face the moose.

Now that I revisit this thread, my physical injuries mean absolutely nothing. It's the other injuries that hurt the most.

If unicorn wins, you gotta make fat poo fairy replace all Great Fairies.

Wah! Hoo! Wah-ha!! That is super cool Branden. What a genuine duder to meet. I'm really happy for you!

Vincent Valentine is the coolest god dang damn Final Fantasy character there ever has been done be. Good work, Ike looks great in-game. He fits! Where are screens of Satoshi? Also! I'd be super curious to see you port Squall over Cloud.

Scrap the Ice Cavern title as well, so the dream isn't 'introduced'. I am very impressed with this, inspired even.

How about:

Sweet logo! Purple and orange is